The Bird with the Crystal Plumage
|
IMDB rating: 7.10 Plot: In Italy, the American writer Sam Dalmas (Tony Musant) witnesses an attempt of murder of the owner of an art gallery, a couple of days before his foreseen return to the United States of America. He decides to stay with his girlfriend Julia (Suzy Kendall) and help the police in the investigation, while the serial killer stalks Julia and him. |
Actors: Musante Tony,Salerno Enrico Maria,Raho Umberto,Romano Renato,Castellano Giuseppe,Adorf Mario,Patti Pino,Di Marco Gildo,Bonaro Omar,Mingozzi Fulvio,Peters Werner,Horror,Mystery,Thriller,
Could someone please mark this English description for me, I really need a second opinion.?
We had to describe something, I chose a garden. To get the higher marks we needed to change the mood at some point. My grade stays the same with this piece, could someone, preferably someone who has taught GCSE English, give me a grade and their opinions. This is now my sixth draft and I have put so many hours in and can’t improve.
In the midst of a beryl landscape, surrounded by rolling hills, lies a cherished paradise. Ostracized from the hub of day to day life, this sanctuary is thriving in isolation. From all corners, sounds radiate like ripples on a pond: twittering robins, rustling leaves, the whistling of wind. Altogether they flood the garden with sweet, mellifluous music. Listening to the melodies are the gargantuan trees, adorned with a dappled amber glow; branches entwine like D.N.A strands to form a sturdy ledge for creatures in need of a rest; complementing their stay are ripe fruits which are there to take as one desires. To attract the wildlife, an extravagant coat of emerald greenery adorns by the mighty protectors.
Positioned on the borders, an array of cerulean, cerise and crimson shades thrive, resembling a stain glass window. Cascading along the perimeter, grand roses stand proud: guards to their territory. Behind the roses, the centre of this arrangement is enriched with vibrant pansies; these privates, although bottom of the hierarchy, are ready to assist the roses in fending off all threats to the harmony of the flowerbed. On the outskirts, daisies are on a constant lookout for danger, ready to alert their companions. Other vegetation congregates so close together that a canopy is formed; insects soon take advantage of this and change the area to their liking by constructing homes and harvesting the available supplies.
A fluent stream composes melodies for the creatures it houses. On the water
